View Full Version : Writing in the active voice using action verbs

02-27-13, 01:16 AM
I hope my writing becomes more compelling. I will use this thread to practice and so can you.

Write one sentence using the active voice with strong action verbs.

Examples of active voice:

Marilyn mailed the letter.
I threw the ball.

Examples of passive voice:

The letter was mailed by Marilyn.
The ball was thrown

Examples of action verbs


"sentences in the active voice have energy and directness, both of which will keep your reader turning the pages."

"Sentences written in the active voice are also less wordy than those in the passive voice – and cutting unnecessary words always improves a piece of writing, whether it’s fiction or non-fiction."

02-27-13, 01:21 AM
I created a writing thread.

02-27-13, 01:27 AM
I highfived anonymouslyadd.

02-27-13, 01:30 AM
BellaVita made me smile.

02-27-13, 01:36 AM
Implementing strategies into your life creates success.

02-27-13, 02:55 AM
Droppin' knowledge to share with others fosters community.

02-27-13, 11:25 AM
Drinking coffee awakens my higher cognitive abilities. ;)

02-28-13, 12:58 AM
I clarified my initial statement so the audience understood my point.

03-01-13, 03:36 AM
Ruminating thoughts chase away a peaceful mind.

03-01-13, 04:36 AM
Ruminating minds chase away a peaceful thought. :)

03-01-13, 12:18 PM
Creativity saps from anonymouslyadd's pages like a ravenous dog waiting for its next meal.

03-01-13, 03:29 PM
I have always been confused by active vs. passive... and I'm not saying that to practice, I am just saying it because it's true. :lol:

It took my professors 3 (of 4) years to give up on trying to explain it to me...

03-01-13, 04:20 PM
I swear I learned it from using Microsoft Word. That stupid annoying bubble coming up alerting me that I am "using the passive voice consider revising":mad::mad:

so annoying.


Microsoft Word taught me about passive writing. :D

03-02-13, 03:02 AM
Writing in the active voice enlivens the reader's brain.

03-02-13, 03:12 AM
Confining my brain's creativity to rules frustrates me.

03-02-13, 06:28 AM
I drink in the smell of earth after rain, ravenously.

03-04-13, 01:54 AM
Fireflies speckled the sky, warring with the stars.

03-04-13, 02:37 AM
That sentence that you wrote, is beautiful and poetic.

Am I doing it right ? :)

03-06-13, 02:57 AM
Seeking love reflects a break in the parent-child relationship.

03-09-13, 12:14 AM
Depressing thoughts drag my soul to the floor and beckon the question, "Why?".

03-12-13, 12:13 AM
I cajoled her to give me a massage.

03-14-13, 01:41 AM
My lips glazed the top of the tongue-searing coffee.

03-14-13, 03:17 AM
I got valuable information from you. thanks for sharing, yes we need to express our feeling with good English, simple and readable sentence.

03-16-13, 12:09 PM
His head bobbed forward, laden with a lack of sleep.

03-16-13, 03:30 PM
Ocyan, I think that the most active sentence would be: "You wrote a sentence that is beautiful and poetic."

And Silvren, what does it for me is asking myself if I can immediately understand from the sentence who acted?

A sentence was written. A crime was committed. A rock was thrown. All passive.

Anonymous wrote a sentence. My client committed a crime. Silvren threw a rock. All active.

Passive voice is handy when you don't know the actor. So "a rock was thrown into the crowd," just tells you that the author either doesn't know who threw it, or wants to hide who threw it.

In my legal writing, I only ever use passive voice when I don't know something, or am trying to conceal something.

03-17-13, 09:58 PM
My brain hurts. Tears trickle down the side of my head.

03-18-13, 01:17 AM
Burrowing its head through the open hole, the snake slinked through as hungry falcons circled above.

03-19-13, 01:10 AM
Gliding through the water, the red snake looked for food.

03-19-13, 10:09 PM
I watched the Butterfly Effect, tonight.

03-27-13, 03:38 AM
Action is empowering.

04-09-13, 09:33 PM
Ocyan's spider frightens me.

04-17-13, 10:18 PM
are we talkin about communicating because I made the mistake of having a script in my head as to how my kid would say they loved me therefore never seeing or hearing there method of sayin they loved me, everyone want to be another willy shakspeare . his writngs are great because he listened then asked question of the people because there was no such thing as a dictionary so when he put word together He/they defined the words , It was a clarification of the conffussion of the times as well as a play Now look what we have even with a dictionary, you have a style yet is there anything their to hear and who can I ask if
It is a correct interpretation willy gave us lots to look at what were we to see,hear, feel,
change or understand diferantly????? when we get what we want, In our struggles for self
and the world makes us king for a day, we must go to the mirror and look at ourselves

06-15-13, 11:25 PM
Crouching below the basement steps, her heart raced against her ribs, anticipating the thief inching towards her.

06-23-13, 08:57 PM
Drawing closer to him, she pursed her lips, and they kissed for the first time.

07-03-13, 05:09 AM
Constructing compelling sentences is not easy, sometimes.

08-03-13, 10:55 PM
Her piano play echoed throughout the walls of Smith's Theatre.

08-03-13, 11:16 PM
Enjoying these, anon. (just had to say) :)

08-03-13, 11:21 PM
Bella Vita's kindness cures cripplingly low self-esteem.

01-13-14, 02:42 AM
Sunsets incite my dreams.

01-13-14, 02:45 AM
While nice clothes and a perm made her look good, manipulation and deceit oozed out of her pores.

01-13-14, 02:50 AM
Colourless green ideas sleep furiously.

01-13-14, 02:53 AM
The pipe dripped all night long and formed a puddle underneath the drain.

01-13-14, 02:53 AM
After racing around the block with her friends, she plopped on the chair and fell asleep.

01-13-14, 03:08 AM
Then, she woke up and did a front handspring and sprinted out the door to go get some donuts.

01-13-14, 03:43 AM
"Replication is no substitute for creativity!" griped Anna.

03-19-14, 12:26 AM
The killer buried his victim underneath the dusty concrete of his basement.

04-10-14, 01:20 AM
The vigorous man climbed the rugged cliffs of the mountain. He almost fell several times. During some moments, the struggle grew so great that his will to fight the jagged edges of the mountain wilted, and he wanted to let go. These moments continued during his journey up the mountain, and if it hadn't been for one thing, he would have failed. That thing transcends human elements, things and physical structures of the earth. That thing draws from experience, hopes and ideas. That thing is a dream.

10-07-14, 12:22 PM
The ducks waddled down the rocky hill to the trickling stream.

10-07-14, 12:27 PM
The angry child smashed cars together while his mother watched and wore concern on her face.

06-16-15, 05:08 AM
Children played outside, and the adults watched them, reminiscing about their childhoods.

06-16-15, 05:09 AM
The grass always displays a bright and healthy green color this time of year.

10-20-16, 12:10 AM
I broke the screen with my bare hands, smashing it to hundreds of tiny pieces.

12-19-16, 10:33 PM
The fox ran.

12-19-16, 10:34 PM
I stumbled across a pair of underwear I had been looking for.

12-19-16, 10:35 PM
I never saw blue eyes like hers before until I pulled her closer to me.