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Quiescent
04-07-03, 06:44 PM
fate-my life is my own insanity,the pain and scars, that life has given, shatterin and scattering, my mind, im lieing on the ground, im weakened, i cant get up, giving up on hope, lieing there, waiting,for fate to crush me the song of death, rising in my mind, its time to go, no time to say good bye, why should i anyways, no except a few really cares about my life,all i see is blck, darkness, no light at the end of the hallway, my life has come to an end, my sight starts to fade, in spirit, i tried to runaway, runaway from fate, iside this box,this inclosed room, my mind, my mind,but it wont help, becuase fate will always catch up with you, running in the dark, i fell, fell and faded away from life itself,this is fate, this is the end...of my life, the existence of my life, is unknown, it seemed to fade, because no one cared, if the few that did, they forgot..., about me, so, this is fate, the end of my life, the end, of my existence

sixes
04-07-03, 07:04 PM
yes i do like your poems. i wish i could write as well. i start and than lose my focus and never finish what i startd.
keep posting. i will try to read as much as i can. but, why do you feel like no one cares?
Sixes

Mary
04-09-03, 01:34 AM
Boogie,

More people care then you think hon... I love ya! Thanks for posting, your writing is direct and to the point. It makes the reader feel how you are feeling, the despair, the pain. It shows the readers the intense fear of being rejected in life. Of feeling small and insecure in a world that sometimes has no meaning. Keep writing sweety. Writing is along with laughter the best medicine there is. Hugs!

Gil
05-22-04, 03:30 PM
Boogie,

Though you posted this poem a long time ago, and I am just now getting to read it, I can remember feeling just as you do when i was in junior high school. It was a horrible experience for me, and I felt as if no one cared. I also wouldn't have listened if someone told me that they *did* care, only actions would have spoken to me. Despair is an enemy to us all, and together we conquer it, but alone it conquers us. Keep venting through poetry, and allow yourself to get close to some people who have told you they care, such as the lovely lady Mary, once you open your heart to friendship, you will be able to see that others do care. It's a long road to thaw a numbed heart, but it's well worth it. Big hugs to you.