View Full Version : Two new poems. I'd like feedback.


sarey
01-28-10, 02:11 PM
1.

Torn,
distraught,
ignited by fire,
spreading, burning to ashes,
until there is nothing left.
Until there is only burnt pieces of what remains, & smoke seeping.
Gone, forever?

2.

Broken, shattered,
numb & cold,
the air is freezing you,
shivers, shakes,
goosebumps upon your skin,
Cracked flesh,
everything's cold & numb,
There's nothing left.
No will, no hope,
without hope, what do you do?

sweetpeas615
02-15-10, 03:32 AM
bEAUTIFUL.